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You recently attended a series of English lessons in a language school. However, you were unhappy with the teaching quality. Write a letter to the director of the school. In your letter: • explain why you chose to study English at the school • describe the problems you had with the lessons • suggest how the classes could be improved

Dear
Mrs.
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 Evet, I am writing
this
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 letter to express my dissatisfaction regarding
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the english
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english
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English
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 lesson I
attend
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 on January
20
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20,
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 as the teaching
statergies
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strategies
 can be improved. I chose to learn
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english
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English
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 as
its
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 an international language, and I am planning to study in London
because
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, because
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 of which I want to practice more
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english
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 and polish my communication skills. My close friend suggested
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me
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to
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try your
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 series classes, as he had studied
from
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here about a year ago.
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, the class was not organised well. Students were not getting the appropriate space to sit and listen
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 lecture.
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,
instructor
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the instructor
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 was
explaing
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explaining
 everything so
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 that most of the students were not able to catch it. Apart from that, he was not involving students in the discussion. I would suggest
if
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lesson
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a lesson
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 is in the form of open
communiction
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communication
 as it
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 interaction and practice to master a different language. I hope you will take my feedback in a positive manner. I look forward to your response. Sincerely, Farah

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Task Response
Your letter has all the parts needed, but use one idea per paragraph and keep a clear order: why you chose the school, the problems, and your ideas to fix them.
Coherence and Cohesion
Work on link words and grammar. Make sentences shorter and use simple words. Keep a formal tone.
Task Response
The letter uses a formal tone and a polite close.
Coherence and Cohesion
The ending asks for a reply and shows a wish for action, and some good order in parts.
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