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Some people believe that they should be able to keep all the money they earn, and should not have to pay tax to the state. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

Most
people
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 reckon that salary from civic duty should be taken by the government,
instead
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individuals
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of individuals
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should keep
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keeping
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money
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the money
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by
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for
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 themselves. I disagree with that statement, since
money
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 which from
taxes
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are diverted
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apply
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into different sectors
that
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apply
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helps
to
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apply
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the country’s development. Nowadays,
incredibly
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an incredibly
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 high amount of
taxes
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to
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goes to
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 the government. It is a civic duty
,
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apply
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 which it cannot be altered or
canceled
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cancelled
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. Most
people
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 work for long periods of time and in different occupations. The amount of
salary-tax
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salary tax
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 varies differently, and some amount of funding is taken every year unnoticeably from
people
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. In fact, if it is accumulated,
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overall
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the overall
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 value of
money
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 will be equal
for
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to
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 roughly
one-month
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one month's
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 income.
Moreover
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, if
this
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money
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 was not taken from humans at all, it
will
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would
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be still
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still be
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 nonsense.
People
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accustomed
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are accustomed
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 to
spend
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spending
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 their
money
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 without thinking or planning. Yet, there are some, but not that most. Cash from job owners can be unremarkable with
contemporary
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a contemporary
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 lifestyle.
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, if
taxes
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 don’t exist, not only
government’s
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the government’s
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 income, but
also
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 all individuals can have
financial
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a financial
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 crisis. Whilst the
money
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 travels hand by hand,
this
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 is a type of cycle
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in that
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that
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which
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people
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 receive their
money
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 again and again.
Government
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The government
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 cannot print
money
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 continuously, as long as they do
this
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,
country
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the country
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 would
have been
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apply
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collapsed
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collapse
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 or would be chaotic.
Money
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 which from residents’ income is distributed
for
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to
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 every employee. Not only for
people
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’s
salary
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salaries
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, but
also
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 for
pension
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pensions
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, construction and other sectors. Still, most
people
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 think that they use
this
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money
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 for their pocket, but the thing is that they do not
recognize
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recognise
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is
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apply
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that they live for
taxes
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. Most researchers stated that
tax
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taxes
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 are Uno-reverse. Uno-reverse means that
money
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is
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travels back to you no matter what you do.
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,
instead
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 of regretting
to pay
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paying
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money
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for
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to
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authorities
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the authorities
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, they should pay it. In conclusion, even though not paying
taxes
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 can be seen as a potential benefit,
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thus
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apply
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it is not. Every person, regardless of their condition, should pay
taxes
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and
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, and
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 they will pay for
this
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planning
Plan your essay first. Say what you think in one line. Then give two reasons and a small example.
structure
Make one clear idea in each part. Put the idea first, then add a detail.
coherence
Use words to link ideas. Words like and, but, also, so, then help the flow.
grammar
Keep sentences short and easy. Check your grammar and use simple form.
content
Give a real example or clear fact. This makes your point strong.
content
The essay shows a clear view that taxes are needed.
content
The topic stays on tax and how it used.
process
The task type is clear, and the writer tries to argue.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • contribute
  • welfare
  • public services
  • progressive taxation
  • distribution of wealth
  • civic duty
  • social cohesion
  • tax evasion
  • economic disparities
  • social unrest
  • individual rights
  • societal responsibilities
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