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Band 2.5

Some people believe that schoolchildren should be made to wear a uniform. Others feel that children should be free to choose their own clothes. Discuss both sides of the argument and say whether you agree with pupils wearing uniforms. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

It
it
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is
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 argued
batween
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between
 most
pupils's
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pupils'
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 parents about their
childrens
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children
 wearing uniforms or not. In my opinion,
i
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I
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 believe wearing matching uniforms will help decline one of the most common
problem
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problems
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 in
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school
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the school
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 community. To start
by
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with
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.
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firstly
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,
i
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I
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 would say teenage students struggle with choosing the right
clothes
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, speically
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speically
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especially
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this
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senstive
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sensitive
age
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, for
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girls
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girls,
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 it takes a lot of their energy to choose
a
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apply
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appropriate
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appropriate,
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 suitable
clothes
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, in
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. In
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 some
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cases
casess
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casess,
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 it
distract
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distracts
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 them from the real main purpose duo
school
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. Watch is pretty normal for
this
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age
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 to be confused and distracted easily.
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instance
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instance,
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yale
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Yale
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collage
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College
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 made a study that showed 60%
from
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of
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 young
age
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 girls go to
school
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to
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for
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 the fun of dressing.
Secoundly
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Secondly
, leaving the
elementry
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elementary
school
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 is a very huge step for
child
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a child
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 leaving their childhood
attuide
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attitude
 to start creating their identity through their
clothes
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 and physical appearance, and to start with
this
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stage
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stage,
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 it's clearly confusing and hard to be
appropiate
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appropriate
, which
leading
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leads
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 us to
next
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the next
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 problem where
this
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age
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 can be
influnced
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influenced
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soical
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social
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who's
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who are
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 not their
age
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wearning unreasnable
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wearing unreasonable
clothes
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, and
student
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students
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 following them as their guidance.
To sum up
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, the education system will be more
convenience
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convenient
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 and logical if every
students
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student
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start
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starts
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 to wear
a
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an
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offical
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official
 uniform, it will decrease a much more problems and
increasing
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increase
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 the
numbers
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number
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 of
pupil's
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pupils'
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 focus.

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planning
Plan first: split the essay into an intro, two body parts, and a short end. Say both sides and your view.
organization
Use topic sentence in each paragraph and link ideas with simple words like and, but, also, because.
language
Keep to short, clear sentences. Check spell and grammar.
development
Give a real, simple example and finish with a clear view in the end.
strength
Shows a view and a goal to help school life.
strength
Gives a real example about dress choice and age.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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