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more and more people prefer to live alone these days. Do you think this is a positive or a negative trend.

It is an irrefutable fact that the majority of people choose to spend their lives alone nowadays. I believe that
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 is a pervasive
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 because
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 scenario can deteriorate their mental health and increase their financial burden.
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disadvantages of living alone is its potential impact on mental health. Humans are social beings
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 who require regular interaction and emotional support. When they spend their time alone, they may experience loneliness, particularly after work or during difficult situations. Over time,
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 sense of isolation can lead to stress, anxiety, and depression. To exemplify, some old people living alone are more vulnerable to psychological problems
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 limited social contact.
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,
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 is not conducive to
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 well-being
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Moreover
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, people who live alone usually experience greater financial responsibility because all the expenses are generally paid individually. Unlike those who share accommodation with their family and friends, a person cannot divide household costs,
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 as rent, groceries, and internet bills.
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, in Canada,
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 rent of
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one bedroom
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 apartment is $1600 per month,
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 their average salary is $2300 per month.
As a result
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, they may struggle to save money and face financial strain.
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,
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 can be economically challenging.
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, I strongly assert that it is a negative
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, as living alone can destroy their mental well-being in the long run
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 can increase their economic stress.

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task
Make the view clear in the first paragraph and end with a short final idea.
coherence
Use more sign words to show the order of ideas; use 'first', 'second', 'third' or 'also' to link.
grammar
Check noun and verb form; use 'people' not 'person' and adjust phrases about money.
examples
Use simple facts or numbers carefully to back points; keep them short.
content
Clear view that living alone can hurt money and mind.
structure
Two main reasons are given with examples.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Insomnia
  • Sleep deprivation
  • Circadian rhythms
  • Productivity
  • Stress
  • Anxiety
  • Cognitive function
  • Melatonin
  • Sleep hygiene
  • Globalization
  • 24/7 economy
  • Blue light
  • Sleep patterns
  • Sleep maintenance insomnia
  • Irregular working hours
  • Lifestyle factors
  • Emotional well-being
  • Health consequences
  • Flexible work hours
  • Quality of life
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