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Some people think that the best way to reduce unemployment is to encourage skilled labor and training programs. Others believe that creating more jobs, regardless of skill level, is the best solution. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

From the beginning of the world, attracting good
workers
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 to build
countries
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 has always been the best idea. In my opinion, I believe that attracting foreign
workers
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 is the best way to develop our
countries
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. Several
countries
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 focus on attracting
workers
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 from foreign places,
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 as China, India, and the United States.
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 is because they require them to build their own
countries
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.
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, Kuwait, a wealthy country in the Middle East, orders many researchers from India to assist with patrol gas problems.
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, Qatar
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Also
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 has a number of foreign doctors
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 hospital quality.
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, attracting talent through immigration programs is essential nowadays because
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 these
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days, it supports the
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 of the
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 to become more beneficial.
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,
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 wealthy places attract
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workers
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,
no-money
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poor
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nations
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 suffer from it.
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 is because highly skilled professionals leave their home
countries
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, vital stuff
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 as healthcare
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 and education. Which coasts a higher damage
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 their
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.
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, African and Asian
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 are suffering from
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 issue, and it makes some
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damage
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 their
econmoy
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economy
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 means they will get
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 from foreign
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 to help themselves.
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, attracting skilled
workers
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 is beneficial for wealthy places, and at the same time, it damages the economy of poor
nations
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. In conclusion, both the benefits for developed
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 and the challenges for developing
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 show that skilled migration has a significant global impact on our lives.
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, it is essential for both
countries
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 to find
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 balance.

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task
Be clear about the views from the task. Say what you think in the end of the intro and in the final paragraph.
structure
Plan before you write. Use parts: intro, 2 body parts, and a short conclusion.
coherence
Keep one idea in each paragraph. Use words like also, but, for example to link ideas.
grammar
Check spelling and grammar. Common mistakes like ´damages´, ´econmoy´, and phrases not clear should be fixed.
lexicon
Use simple words. Avoid long or hard ones.
content
Give a real example that fits the view you discuss and show how it helps your point.
structure
End with a clear view. Make the conclusion short and strong.
content
The writer tries to show two sides of the topic.
structure
Some points are shown with examples from real places.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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