The charts show how tourism to two countries changed over a 50-year period.

The pie charts provide data on the proportion of tourism changes to Australia and Germany over a 50-year span from 1960 to 2010.
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, it is evident that there were of the essence changes in the percentage of how tourism changed.
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, in Australia, Europe exhibited a sharp decline,
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in Germany, it downward dominant trend throughout the period. In Australia, Europe began at just over half in 1960 and
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decreased to 10% in 2010. Meanwhile, the USA and Britain showed a slight decrease from 12% and 25% to 7% and 20%, each. As for Asia was the dominant one
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, starting at 10% in 1960 , and it
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showed a rise to 63
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by the
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of the period. In Germany, Europe started at 45% in 1960 , and it exhibited a slight decline, accounting for 40% in 2003. Notably, Britain recorded the lowest proportion, starting at 20% in 1960
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then
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it declined to 9% by the
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of the period.
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, the USA and Asia stood at 25% and 10%, respectively , in 1960 and
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showed a decline to 29% and 10%, respectively ,
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