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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make compariosns where relevant.

The line graph illustrates the
amount
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number
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 of
visitors
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 visiting a
particluar
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particular
Caribean
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Caribbean
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 island over a
period
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 of 7
years
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.
Overall
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,
visitors
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 who
staied
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stayed
 in the cruise ship reached the highest by
raking
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ranking
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,
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While
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while
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visitors
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 who
staied
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stayed
 in the island showed
a
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apply
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fluctuations over the first half of the
period
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,
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.
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In
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addition
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addition,
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 it decreased after 
that
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However
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,
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 total was the high the most. In 2010,
visitors
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 who were
in
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on
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 the cruise grew from 0 to 0.5
million
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 tourists in 2011
,
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.
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Furthermore
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 between 2011 and
2012
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2012,
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 it declined
,
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. Additionally
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additionally
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additionally,
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visitors
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 rose sharply from 0.5 to 1.5
million
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 over five
years
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 of the
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period
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five-year period
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. Tourists who were
in
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on
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 the island remained stable
it
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in
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 the first two
years
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,
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Then
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then
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 it dramatically increased from 0.8 to 1.5
million
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visitors
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,
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.
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After that
it
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, it
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 showed a fall from 2015 to 2016, the rate decreased from 1
milion
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million
 to
the
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apply
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half,
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Then
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then
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 it increased
repeativaly
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steadily
 between 2016 and 2017. The total was 1
million
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 at
the
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first
,
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.
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Then
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 it rose from 1.5 to 2.5
million
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 over a
period
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 of 7
years
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,
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.
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Meanwhile,it sharply increased from 2.5 to 3.5
million
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,
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 in 2017.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, period, years, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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