The bar chart illustrates the percentage of how parents in a country spent time taking care of their children in the evening in 2022. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart provides the information about how the
parents
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are spent
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spend
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time for their
children
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to taking care of in the evening in the year of 2022. It has
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been categorised
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in to
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into
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four
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such
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, such
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as Dressing, homework, playing games and preparing
to
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for
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bed.
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen that mothers are taking care of their
children
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with dressing as the highest level.
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fathers are not good at
on
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it on
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their own in all the fields.
To begin
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with, mothers are highly capable of taking care of their
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on their own to come
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In
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dressing the
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children
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children,
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mother's
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mothers'
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contributions are around 75% in
while
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father's
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fathers'
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contributions
was
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were
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only 3%
own
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on
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their own.
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23% is good
at
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apply
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when both
parents
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together
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are together
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.
While
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,
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apply
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playing games with the
children
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both
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, both
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parents
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together makes a big difference
around
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of around
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70%.
In
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contrast
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mother's
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mothers
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always have a big impact
in
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on
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the
child
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child's
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life where
as
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whereas
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father's
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fathers
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have less influence.
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Moreover
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over
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over,
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when it comes to both
parents
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together makes a big difference.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in contrast, while".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words parents, children with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • Percentage
  • Parents
  • Spent time
  • Taking care
  • Children
  • Evening
  • 2022
  • Summarise
  • Information
  • Main features
  • Comparisons
  • Relevant
  • Patterns
  • Trends
  • Highest
  • Lowest
  • Activities
  • Gender
  • Conclusion
  • Findings
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