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The pie chart and table illustrate information about the population of Australia accor

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The provided pie chart and table present detailed information regarding the population of Australia
according to
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 various nationalities and regions. The data is expressed in percentages , allowing a direct comparison between the categories illustrated.
Overall
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, it is immediately apparent that Australian
citizens
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 represented the most significant proportion,
whereas
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 Dutch individuals accounted for
a
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the
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 smallest share.
Furthermore
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, the data reveals noticeable variations among the categories, indicating a clear disparity between the highest and lowest figures. With regard to the pie chart, Australian nationals,
which
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who
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 constituted approximately 73%, emerged as the leading category.
This
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 was closely followed by other
citizens
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standing
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, standing
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 at around 14%. Meanwhile, British people recorded a comparatively lower figure of 7%,
although
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 it remained higher than several other categories.
By comparison
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,
Dutch
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the Dutch
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 population accounted
only
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for only
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 1% , highlighting a substantial gap between the extremes. Turning to the table, it can be observed that Chinese
citizens
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 stood at approximately 99% in
city
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the city
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,
while
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 only 1% of
citizens
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placed
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were placed
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 in
countryside
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the countryside
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areas
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apply
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.
In contrast
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, Australian nationals who resided
at
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in
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 urban areas remained relatively modest , at around 80%.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words citizens with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "comparison" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stand" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pie chart
  • table
  • people
  • group
  • part
  • share
  • percent
  • number
  • figure
  • area
  • city
  • town
  • country
  • young
  • child
  • teen
  • adult
  • old
  • middle
  • more
  • less
  • many
  • few
  • most
  • least
  • bigger
  • smaller
  • higher
  • lower
  • increase
  • rise
  • decrease
  • fall
  • stay the same
  • around
  • about
  • compare
  • trend
  • overall
  • describe
  • feature
  • focus
  • note
  • than
  • and
  • but
  • however
  • for
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