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It is better for college students to live far away from home than live at home with their parents. Do you agree or disagree?

There is an argument that living far away from
home
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 is better for college
students
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 than living at
home
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 with their
parents
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. I agree with
this
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 view
and
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 in
this
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 essay, I will give my opinion. Let's begin by looking at the reasons for my opinion. First of all, living alone or away from
home
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 is an opportunity for college
students
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 to
raise
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develop
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 responsibility and independence. The college
students
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 have to do housework alone
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such
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, such
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 as cooking and laundry
which
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, which
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was
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apply
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their
parents
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have done
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used to do
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 at
home
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before
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apply
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.
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, they can learn how to do housework and manage time and money for that, and raise
responsibilty
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responsibility
 and independence by living alone without help from
parents
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. Another advantage is freedom. The
students
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 can
controll
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control
 their whole time and space.
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, they can invite their friends whenever or spend time
on
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in
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the
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apply
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bed all day. Nobody
interfere
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interferes
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them
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with them
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unlike
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, unlike
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 living with
parents
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.
On the other hand
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, There is
a
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the
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 drawback of living far away from
home
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 is the cost. It is needed quite charges for living
like
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, like
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 rent, food and daily necessities
so
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, so
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 they should bear the expense In conclusion,
although
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 there is
the
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a
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 cost
for
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of
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 living, I believe living alone far from
home
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 is a great experience for
students
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task response
Task response: Start with a clear view in the first line. Give two strong reasons with simple proof. End with a short idea that sums up your view.
coherence cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Use one idea per line and show how ideas go to the next. Use simple link words like also, but, so to connect ideas. Check spelling and grammar.
task response
The writer shows a clear view.
coherence cohesion
There is a simple plan and two ideas are given.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • independence
  • responsibility
  • life skills
  • budgeting
  • cooking
  • time management
  • social integration
  • networking
  • extracurricular activities
  • academic resources
  • distractions
  • cultural exposure
  • personal development
  • global understanding
  • self-discovery
  • personal growth
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