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Writing Samples
Band 3

Companies and individuals should pay to clean up the pollution they produce, not the government. To what extent do you agree?

Pollution is one of the most critical issues of
todays
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 world. The question is who should
be
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be responsible for paying the expenses of cleaning the environment, the
respnsible
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responsible
organizations
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 or individuals or the government? I agree that entities causing
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 damage should take care of fixing it because
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 will
leads
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 them to be
carful
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 of doing
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 harm to the environment again and will not put
alot
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a lot
 of
finincial
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financial
 pressure on the government.
on
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 the one hand, people and companies who conducted an activity that resulted in
polution
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pollution
has
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 to be responsible for it. By doing
so
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 they will be careful not to produce smoke, garbage, and other
polluters
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 to nature.
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 will reduce the percentage of current and future polluted areas.
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, the exemption of governments
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 paying these expenses will help to save
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 money for other purposes. Countries will be able to allocate the preserved amount for other meaningful cases,
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 the
cities
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 infrastructural system.
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, maintaining a clean environmental
surrounding
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 is a key element for saving the earth.
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 responsibility should fall in the
hand
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hands
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 of
indivisuals
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individuals
 and companies producing these
polluttional
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polluting
 elements that affect our
plant
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planet
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 negatively.

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structure
Use a clear plan. Start with your view, then give two main reasons, then a short example for each, then end with a conclusion.
language
Check grammar and spelling. Fix common errors so the meaning is easy to read.
coherence
Link ideas with simple words like 'and', 'but', 'also', 'for example', to make the flow better.
task response
A clear view on who should pay is stated.
structure
The essay has an ending that restates the view.
coherence
The writer uses 'on the one hand' and 'on the other hand' to show two sides.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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