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Some people believe that in the future, most cities will become unlivable due to pollution and overcrowding. Others think technological innovation will solve these problems. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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 some individuals agree that in the forthcoming, the majority of cities will be unhabitable for
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 reason of polluted environment and overpopulated, others believe that new
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 technology will solve these issues. Regarding the topic,
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 essay will examine both views,
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 from my perspective, technological innovation is a positive
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 whilst self-awareness is
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 vital.
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 the first view, the future world will be a tough place to live in. The
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 of people
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 growing rapidly
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 the
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surroundings
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 are
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 affected by their actions.
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, it
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 and awareness of citizens to prevent disasters. Discussing the second perspective, some argue that new kinds of innovations will intercept
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 catastrophic event. There might be a new way to preserve the environment and protect our home, since technology
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 growing swiftly.
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, our self-consciousness is a crucial thing, since our actions determine the upcoming time.
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, all
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human beings
 need to take action to stop
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 on our home, since we do not want our
childrens
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children
 to witness the destruction of nature and environment.

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structure
Plan your essay with a clear intro, body lines for two sides, and a short ending. Say your view in the intro and repeat it in the end.
content
Give one or two simple facts or small details to back each main idea. Use easy examples you know.
grammar
Check grammar and word use. Some words are wrong or not clear. Use plain and common words.
style
Keep sentences short. Use simple form and avoid hard words.
content
There is a clear plan to talk about both sides and your own view.
structure
The essay shows a clear view and a simple structure.
cohesion
You use linking words to join thoughts.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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