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Band 7

Some people think that government should spend money on railways. Others believe that there should be more investments into new roads. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Society has been divided into two parts; the first group believes that policymakers should concentrate on developing railways,
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 others, vice versa, opine that highway construction is more important.
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 there are many supported arguments for both viewpoints that could be mentioned,
this
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 essay concentrates on the discussion of two of them. On the one hand, the train line, mostly more ecological, and I am convinced it is vital for future generations.
On the other hand
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, bridging distant living areas by roads has crucial economic importance.
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, the following paragraphs contain information and examples about the mentioned opinions.
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 with, environmental and especially air pollution issues have become vital across the globe nowadays.
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, the development of the railway transportation organisation could be the solution, because the train engines commonly use electricity as an operating power
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 of fossil fuels.
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, the environmental impact is almost absent, taking into account the amount of cargo volume and the number of passengers that could be transported by a developed railway
system
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 compared with other options.
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, extensive train line infrastructure in Japan has helped to reduce air pollution by 40% in 20 years.
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, refining the road infrastructure is crucial for the
economy
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, especially in suburban and rural areas. Highways, bridging distant towns, suppliers and customers, factories and warehouses are vital, like blood in a body. Time is one of the most important things in the business environment and the
economy
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.
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, delivery by vehicles through the developed highway
system
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 is the best time/cost option present day.
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, in the USA, with a highly developed highway structure, up to 90% of all cargoes are carried by trucks, which influences through business and taxes on the
economy
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. In conclusion, railways have an advantage as a more eco-friendly transportation
system
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 compared with others and provide long-term benefits, and I believe that governors should pay more attention to eco-friendly railways, focusing on the investments for the future.
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, the broad, well-maintained road
system
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 is still necessary for business and the
economy
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 as oxygen nowadays.

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task response
Plan before you write. Make a short plan with four parts: intro, view for railways, view for roads, and your view. Use one clear idea in each part.
coherence
Use simple links to show how ideas go together. Start with a link word, then give the idea. Keep ideas in the same order.
content
The essay tries to discuss both sides and to give a view.
content
It gives some examples to back a point.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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