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The pie charts show the use of water in agriculture in 2004 and the value of product in australia at the same year.

The pie charts show data about the usage of
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 for agriculture and the value of production in Australia in 2004.
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, it is evident that
water
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 used for vegetables was the most significant,
whereas
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income
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 from rice accounted for the smallest proportion. In detail, 46% of
water
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 was utilised for vegetables, making it the dominant category. Fruit
income
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 was the second most common factor, representing 40%.
This
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 suggests that vegetation remains a crucial category.
According to
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 the total
income
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 of products, vegetables were in second place at 31%.
While
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 the usage of
water
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 for fruits was slightly less than its total
income
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 at 28%. Talking about categories with similar percentages of total
income
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, it was dandelion and lime, with 8% each.
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, categories with similarities at 3% were dandelion and rice, which remained the smallest proportion in the usage of
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. At the same time, lime was one of the smallest proportions with 8%.
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, cereal stayed stable at 12% in both sections.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, income with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remains" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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