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The diagram below shows a small local museum and its surrounndings in 1957 and 2007

The map illustrates a tiny local
museum
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 and its surroundings in 1957 and 2007.
Overall
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, it became more convenient for comers
due to
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 the addition of some facilities.
However
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, its surroundings
shranked
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shrank
 considerably
due to
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 the
cutting-down
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 of
plants
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. In 1957,
the
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apply
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most
portion
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apply
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of
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museum
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the museum
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were
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was
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 occupied by
garden
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a garden
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. There were various types of
plants
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 all around the
museum
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. The main road which led to
entrance
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the entrance
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 hall was situated at the bottom of the layout,
surrounding
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with
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by
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plants
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.
Moreover
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,
national
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the national
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history
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 exhibition was located at the
center
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centre
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 of the
museum
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behind
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, behind
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 the local
history
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 and
museum
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 store rooms. By 2007, the environmental area had
been exprecienced
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experienced
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significant
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a significant
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loose
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loss
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 of
plants
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, making
a
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apply
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room for other facilities.
In contrast
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,
main
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the main
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 building was expanded
due to
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 the addition of
reception
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a reception
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 and
cafe
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a cafe
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.
However
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, the entrance was relocated to the
west-side
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west side
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 of the building.
Additionally
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, special exhibitions and
education
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an education
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 centre were
also
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 added to the top of
local
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the local
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history
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 room. Meanwhile, the main road and
history
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 room
were
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remained unchanged.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "due to, however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words museum, plants, history with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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