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You have recently missed a project deadline which resulted in your company losing an important client. Write a letter to your senior director. In your letter ● apologise for what happened •● explain why you missed the deadline •● tell him/her how you will avoid this situation in future.

Dear Sir, I am writing
this
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 letter regarding the
lose
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loss
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 of
a
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an
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 important client cause
of
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to
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 my mistake. I really want to
apologies
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apologise
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 for
coming
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being
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 late
in
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to
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meeting
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the meeting
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due to
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this
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this,
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 our meeting was cancelled
and
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, and
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project
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the project
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 was not completed on
time
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. I would like to tell you the whole situation
which was
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that
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occured
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occurred
that
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at that
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time
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. Actually, one of my close
freind
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friends
 had an attack
and
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, and
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 he was
unconcious immidately
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unconscious immediately
.
Moreover
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, only his mother is living with him, so she
callled
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called
 me
tell
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to tell
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 the whole situation. It was
really
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a really
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 tough
time
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 for me
I
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. I
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ran there and brought him to the
near
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nearby
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 city hospital
and
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, and
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Dr
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the doctor
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 started his treatment as soon as we reached. After a
while
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, when I saw the
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time
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time,
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 I had only half an hour for the meeting.
Therefore
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, when I reached at office meeting had finished. I really feel so bad, because
of
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apply
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my
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apply
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we
face
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 a huge
lose
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loss
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 of company.
However
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,
the
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apply
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due to
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 that situation
it
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, it
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 was very difficult for me to leave him during his critical
time
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. I hope you will understand me. Apart from the whole
thing
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thing,
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 I make a backup plan for
future
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the future
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, if we
face
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this
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the
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 same thing. We arrange
extra
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an extra
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 presentation
If
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if
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 one
collegue
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colleague
does
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is
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 not
able
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able,
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then
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 another one will do
on
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it on
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the behalf of
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behalf of the
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 other. I hope you cooperate with me, we can
also
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do
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have
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face
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 to
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face
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face-to-face
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 conversation on it. Your sincerely, Rajan.

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content
Say sorry clearly at the start and take the blame.
content
Explain the reason briefly and avoid too many personal details.
planning
Give a real plan to avoid this in the future with concrete steps.
structure
Try one idea per paragraph and short sentences.
content
Takes responsibility for the mistake.
planning
Offers a plan to prevent repeats.
tone
Keeps a respectful tone.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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