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Cars come in all different shapes and sizes. Some prefer a large one, while others a compact one. What are the advantages and disadvantages of each type and which would you prefer?

Cars
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 are manufactured in different shapes, colours, and sizes.
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 some people prefer larger
ones
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, others go for compact vehicles.
This
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 essay will discuss the pros and cons of both versions before presenting my own preference.
To begin
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with
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with,
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 the merits of large
cars
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, they are more spacious
and
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, and
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therefore
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 they have the capacity to
accomodate
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accommodate
 more passengers.
Therefore
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, bigger
cars
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 are good for family vacations and
city to city
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city-to-city
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 holiday trips because they have greater leg space
which
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, which
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 offers
more
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a more
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 relaxed ride experience.
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for
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also
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 take more luggage
along with
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 them and can sit
peaceful
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 without straining their muscles when
traveling
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travelling
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 for long distances.
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furthermore
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, bigger
cars
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 have more
advance
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 features like automatic doors and windows
which
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, which
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 give a more luxurious feel to the rider.
In contrast
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, compact vehicle has
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it's
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 own merits over the large
ones
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. First of all, they are more
affodable
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affordable
 and cheaper options as compared to bigger
ones
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. Compact automobiles require less fuel than the larger
ones
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.
Moreover
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, compact
cars
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 are
more
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easier to use for new drivers as they can easily drive through congested roads.
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Secondly
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Secondly,
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 smaller
cars
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 are a more convenient option for cities with heavy traffic.
For instance
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, in a city like Karachi, where streets are narrow and usually have traffic, it is better to use a smaller car. To sum it up, both types have
it's
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their
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 own advantages and disadvantages.
However
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, I would prefer compact
cars
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 over large
ones
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 as they have lower prices and are
also
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 convenient for new learners to drive.

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grammar
Check your grammar and spelling. Correct 'accomodate' to 'accommodate'; use 'its' not 'it's' when you mean ownership.
style
Use shorter, simpler sentences. Break long lines into two parts.
structure
Keep the order clear: first discuss big cars, then small cars, then give your view.
vocabulary
Choose easy words from the common list. Avoid hard or fancy words.
content
Add clear examples that show your points and stay on topic.
punctuation
Watch punctuation, and use commas and periods properly.
structure
The essay has a plan with introduction, two body parts, and a short end.
content
Ideas are easy to see: big cars for family use, small cars for city driving.
task
Your view is stated in the end.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • car
  • big
  • small
  • large
  • compact
  • space
  • room
  • seat
  • boot
  • trunk
  • family
  • trip
  • travel
  • comfort
  • safety
  • price
  • cost
  • fuel
  • gas
  • engine
  • power
  • speed
  • park
  • drive
  • city
  • road
  • highway
  • luggage
  • bag
  • child
  • friend
  • easy
  • hard
  • better
  • worse
  • need
  • choice
  • prefer
  • option
  • use
  • pollution
  • crash
  • weather
  • tough
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