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Writing Samples
Band 3.5

Many people believe that living in city greater benefits compared to life in the city. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is argued that people can get
better
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a better
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life style
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lifestyle
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while
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 living in
city
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a city
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instead
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 of
countryside
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the countryside
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. I totally agree with
this
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 because it
effects
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affects
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 the economy of persons and their living standards. Which gonna discuss in the upcoming paragraphs. One
and
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of and
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 most obvious reasons is that economic growth, to elaborate
it
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on it
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 more,
there
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apply
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they can get more opportunities
wether
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whether
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 they wanna
job
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a job
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or
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, or
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 they wanna continue their studies.
Due to
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 in the
towns
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towns,
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 there are more
option
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options
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 for students
like
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, like
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well known
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well-known
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 universities and
colleges
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colleges,
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 in which they can
bright
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brighten
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 their future. If they want to do
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a job
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job
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job,
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 they can get a chance
of
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to
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 enhance their business.
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, in
India
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India,
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 when people prefer to move from
countryside
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the countryside
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 to
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the city
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city
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city,
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 they
changed
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 their
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life
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lives
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 fully. Another reason is that transport, to justify it more, in the urban areas masses can get more convenient transport as compared with villages. Because
,
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apply
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 in the towns there is public transport which is cheap and reliable, citizens can travel anytime to anywhere. In which they feel
more safe
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safer
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 and secure
their
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, their
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life
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 become more sustainable and
liveable
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livable
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.
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, in India
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, at
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at
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in
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 Delhi
with
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, with
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 the access
of
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to
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tube
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the tube
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people
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, people
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 can travel anytime and
it's coast
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it costs
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 less than private vehicles. Which makes their
life
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 easier.
Hence
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, their lifestyle
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has change
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change
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changed
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 totally. In conclusion, in the city centre
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, individuals
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individuals
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individuals'
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life
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lives
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 become
more
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apply
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easier and happier
comparing
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compared
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with
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to
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 the
country side
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countryside
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because of
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for
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 some reasons. They can get what they want in their
life
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.

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task response
State your view clearly at the start and keep it firm. Also show a bit of other view to show you know both sides.
coherence
Make a short plan in the intro. Then write one sentence to start each paragraph that links to the last one.
task response
The writer gives a clear view and makes a plan in the text.
coherence
There is a simple order (intro, body, end) and some link words.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • city
  • country
  • life
  • living
  • jobs
  • work
  • pay
  • schools
  • hospitals
  • shops
  • transport
  • train
  • bus
  • traffic
  • noise
  • crowded
  • cost
  • money
  • family
  • friends
  • culture
  • events
  • health
  • safety
  • space
  • nature
  • calm
  • stress
  • balance
  • choice
  • learn
  • skill
  • network
  • easy
  • convenient
  • access
  • doctor
  • emergency
  • pollution
  • green
  • air
  • travel
  • daily
  • lifestyle
  • escape
  • business
  • office
  • shop
  • culture
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