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Band 4

Some people believe that it is more important to focus on the future, while others argue that we should pay more attention to the present. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some
individuals
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conviced
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convinced
 that we have to concentrate attention on the
future
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.
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 others tend to think that
present
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the present
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 is more crucial.
This
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 essay will discuss both views before presenting my own opinion. People who focus on the
future
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 believe that it is important to plan ahead and think about long-term goals. A carefully planned strategy can significantly improve a person’s career.
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, understanding one's strengths and weaknesses helps
individuals
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 choose a suitable profession and develop their strongest skills.
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, long-term planning is essential not only for
individuals
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 but
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 for large structures
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 as businesses, governments, and scientific projects. Major changes often require many years of preparation and adjustment.
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, governments cannot implement policies that only provide short-term benefits, because
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 decisions may lead to serious economic problems in the
future
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.
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, some people believe that focusing on the present is more important. Living in the moment can improve people’s happiness, health, and daily well-being. When
individuals
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 concentrate too much on the
future
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, they may experience constant stress and anxiety about things that have not yet happened. Paying attention to the present helps people enjoy everyday life and appreciate small moments of happiness.
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, they may feel more satisfied with their lives. In
conlusion
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conclusion
,focus
in
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on
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 the
future
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 will help you in the
future
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 and sacrifice joy
your
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in your
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 present.And paying attention to present sacrifice your
future
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 in the name of
moment
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the moment
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. I believe we should plan for the
future
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 but
also
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 live well now.So
combination
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a combination
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 of
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this
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these
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 two
concept
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concepts
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 will
gurantee
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guarantee
 you
enjoyable
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an enjoyable
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 and productive
live
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life
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.

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language
Fix many spelling and grammar mistakes. Use clear simple words.
content
Make your opinion clear in the end. State it in one short line.
coherence
Use linking words to show flow between ideas.
task
Give more full examples and explain why they show your view.
style
Make long sentences shorter. Use one idea per sentence.
content
Two views are shown and a personal view is added.
coherence
Some linking phrases are used, like 'On the other hand' and 'As a result'.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • future
  • present
  • plan
  • focus
  • attention
  • balance
  • decision
  • choice
  • time
  • life
  • work
  • health
  • family
  • happiness
  • problem
  • solution
  • benefit
  • risk
  • idea
  • example
  • now
  • then
  • today
  • tomorrow
  • goal
  • progress
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