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Band 4.5

You live in a small apartment building with a parking lot in back, and you often cannot find an empty parking space when you get home from work. Write a letter to your landlord. In your letter • describe the situation. • explain why it bothers you. • suggest something the landlord could do to solve the problem. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear ____

Dear Apartment Manager, I hope you are doing well. I am writing to express my concern regarding
a
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apply
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car
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 parking. I have been living here for
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last
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the last
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 five years. I always go to
office
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the office
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 by
car
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, but when I come back
to
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home in
evening
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the evening
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. I noticed all parking lots are full and I
become
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am
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 unable to park my
car
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 there. As per
situation
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the situation
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,
always I
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I always
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 parked my
car
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 on the shoulder of
road
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the road
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.
Due to
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this
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this,
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 I
also
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 get
parking
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a parking
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 ticket from
parking
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the parking
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 enforcement department of
city
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the city
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.
Moreover
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,
this
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 problem
also
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lead
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leads
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 to traffic
congestions
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congestion
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 in residential
area
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areas
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. As per
solution
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the solution
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, you should allow
to residents
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residents to
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 park only
their
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one vehicle in
apartment
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the apartment
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 parking area because some families have more than two vehicles and all they
parked
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park
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 in
same
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the same
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 parking area.
Therefore
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, no
any
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single parking lot
left
Verb problem
is left
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 behind when I come in
evening
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the evening
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 after
finish
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finishing
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 my job. I truly believe you will take appropriate measures to overcome
this
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 issue. Best Regards, Balraj Singh

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structure
Use one idea in each paragraph. Start with the problem, then say why it matters, then a simple plan.
grammar
Use clear, correct grammar. For example, say 'I have lived here for five years' and 'When I come home in the evening, I cannot find a space.' Avoid long, confusing phrases.
plan
Be clear on the plan. Say exactly what the landlord can do, like 'allow one car per home' or 'mark spaces for residents'.
grammar
Watch tenses and small words. Use 'the', 'a', 'is', 'are' correctly.
tone
End with a polite request for a reply or talk about it. A short line can help.
task response
The writer shows care for the issue and asks for a fix.
greeting closing
Polite closing is used.
structure
It has a letter form with Dear and close.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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