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In many countries plastic containers have become more common than ever and used by food and dink companies. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Around the world,
plastic
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containers
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 are increasingly used by
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food
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the food
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 and beverage industry. Some people argue that the benefits of using
plastic
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containers
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 outweigh the harms that
it
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they
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causes
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cause
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.
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, I think the harms of using plastics
is
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are
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 severe enough to advocate against it. In
this
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 essay, we will discuss the benefits of
plastic
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containers
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 and the damage
it
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they
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causes
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cause
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, with examples of each. It is hard to overstate the opportunity that
plastic
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containers
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 created for the
food
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 industry. Suddenly, we have the ability to create
containers
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 of any shape we want, which
allow
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allows
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 the
food
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 industry to create
containers
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 in shape, size or design that would be impossible to do with metal or glass. Unlike organic materials
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 as leaves, wood or paper,
plastic
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 does not degrade over time.
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,
plastic
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 is much cheaper than metal or glass, which means companies no longer need to collect bottles from consumers to be reused.
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,
plastic
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 comes with various harms to our
body
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bodies
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 and
environment
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the environment
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.
Plastic
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 can melt if exposed to heat, potentially contaminating the
food
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 or beverage it contains with dangerous chemicals.
Meanwhile
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 the very advantages that
plastic
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 confers
amplifies
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amplify
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 the harm it does to the environment. Its
longetivity
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longevity
 means that it does not break down, filling landfills, rivers and oceans with
plastic
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 waste that lasts forever,
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 the very low cost it takes to produce discourages recycling. These harms have led environmental groups to call for
prohibition
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the prohibition
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 of most types of plastics, and where
plastic
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 use is unavoidable, to force the manufacturer to recycle as much of it as possible. In conclusion,
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plastic
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 confers many advantages and some use of it is unavoidable, it harms our health and environment in myriad ways.
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, I think we should use as little of it as possible, and
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apply
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reuse and recycle as much of what we cannot avoid using as possible.

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grammar
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content
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structure
Make a simple plan: intro with your view, 2 body parts, and a short conclusion. Use easy linking words to move from idea to idea.
stance
You state your view clearly and keep it in the end.
coverage
You cover both sides of the issue, not only one side.
cohesion
Some linking words help the ideas stick together.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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