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The graph below shows the proportion of four different materials that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country.

The chart illustrates the proportion of four different objects that were recycled between 1982 and 2010.
Overall
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,
the
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apply
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all of the
materials
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 increased
the
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throughout the
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 whole
period
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. Paper & cardboards, glass
containars
Correct your spelling
containers
 and plastics
a
Verb problem
show a
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little bit of growth, but
aluminum
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aluminium
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 cans rise in skyrockets. The The paper & cardboard
and
Punctuation problem
, and
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 glass
containaers
Correct your spelling
containers
particularly
Verb problem
are particularly
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 the same. Both
materials
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 first decreased, after that 1990 time
period
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 increased to 1994. Paper &
cardboards
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cardboard
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 decline after 1994, but glass
getting
Verb problem
is
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increase
Replace the word
increasing
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. Approximately 10 percentage
grow
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grows
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 both. The plastics are almost the same
almost
Punctuation problem
, almost
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 don’t be changed. Starting in 1990, approximately 4 or 5
percent
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per cent
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, in the
end
Punctuation problem
end,
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 recycled 7 or 8
materials
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 in 2010.
However
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, the
aluminum
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aluminium
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 increased the exception of other
materials
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. Because, before the
period
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 starts
5
Punctuation problem
, 5
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percent
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per cent
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but
Punctuation problem
, but
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,
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apply
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 over the
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period
Punctuation problem
period,
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 its growth is 45
percent
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per cent
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.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words materials, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportion" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • recycled
  • materials
  • percentage
  • paper and cardboard
  • glass
  • plastic
  • metal
  • stable
  • noticeable
  • rise
  • significant increase
  • accounting for
  • consistent
  • ste steadily
  • dramatically
  • nearly
  • worth noting
  • relatively low
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