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The line graph compares the number of wildlife population per year from 2017 to 2022.

The line chart provides information about
count
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the count
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 of
diferrent
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different
 fauna creatures annually over a five-year period from 2017 to 2022.
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, it can be clearly seen that whales remain at the same number as at the beginning. Another striking feature is that bears and
dolphins
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 had approximately the opposite patterns. Looking at the details, as regards
whales
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whales,
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 they experienced fluctuation over the period in question.
Initialy
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Initially
 they accounted for 80 persons and
have
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had
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 a deviation during all time at 20
persond
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persons
 every year.
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, in 2022 it was as in 2017.
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, when it comes to Bears and
Dolphins
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, it went in the opposite direction. In
2017
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2017,
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it
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there
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was
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wasn't
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weren't
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any
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no
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 bears, but after
that
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that,
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 it witnessed a significant rise and in the end made up nearly 180.
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,
dolphins
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 had an absolutely another trend.
Initially
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, it was around 160
dolphins
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, but
following
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this
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this,
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 it illustrated a considerable decline. Because of that
in
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, in
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 2020
it
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there
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was
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were
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 only a mere ten
persons
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people
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and
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, and
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 since 2022 they
were
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have become
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extincted
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extinct
.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words dolphins with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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