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The table below shows the percentage of first-year students who gave a ‘very good’ rating to the resources provided by the college, for three courses. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table provides data on the proportion of students in terms of evaluating the
courses
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 offered by the college in three diverse specialisations
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economics
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,
law
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, and
commerce
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.
Overall
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, it is evident that there were essential differences in the percentage of several
courses
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. Particularly, the largest amount of ratings was on
commerce
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,
while
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 the
least
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smallest
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 amount was on
law
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.
Law
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 and
commerce
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 were the dominant
courses
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 as
for
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with
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 pre-course information
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 amounting to 72% and 95%, each,
while
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economics
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 was lower compared to other
courses
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, making up 59%. Following teaching by a tutor,
economics
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 and
commerce
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 exhibited almost similar results, at around 90%; as for
law
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, it was the least rated category, making up 62% and 76%, respectively. Turning to resources (print) on
economics
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 and
law
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 topped the list in
this
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 category, accounting for 81% and 85%, respectively, and
law
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 made up the lowest at 70%.
By contrast
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,
law
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 was the least popular course
on
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 other sources,
whereas
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 the rates in the rest of the
courses
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 comprise around 80%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words courses, economics, law, commerce with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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