The chart above shows the number of homes built between 2000 and 2009 in two cities, Derby and Nottingham.

The chart above shows the number of homes built between 2000 and 2009 in two cities, Derby and Nottingham.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The chart above shows the number of homes built between 2000 and 2009 in two cities, Derby and Nottingham.
The histogram
illustate
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illustrates
the number of
houses
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built from 2000 to 2009 in
Derby
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and Nottingham.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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the
amout
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amount
of building
home
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homes
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for both cities
is
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has
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incresed
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increased
during
nine-year
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the nine-year
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studied
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study
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.
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However
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However,
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Derby
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is almost
regolary
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regular
in their
grow
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growth
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up
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apply
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,
insted Nottingam
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instead Nottingham
has irregular development. First of all,
it is clear that
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Derby
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was growth
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grew
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during the time
analyzed
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analysed
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. The major
develpment
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development
of the city was in 2009 when it
is
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apply
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achived
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achieved
around 350 new
houses
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built. In
2000
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2000,
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there
is
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was
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a minimum
with
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of
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50 new homes
erect
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erected
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. In between there is a constant
grow
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growth
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,
afer
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after
2003, in
this
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year
Derby
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was
build
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built
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around 100 new
buildgs
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buildings
for domestic usage
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. This
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this
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value
remain
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remains
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costant
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constant
since 2007. In 2008
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,
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go
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it went
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up to around 380.
Focussing
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Focusing
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on Nottingham
the
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, the
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maximum rate was
achived
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achieved
in 2009
whit
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with
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230
houses
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built, the minimum
is
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was
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duringe
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in
2006
whit
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with
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10 new
building
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buildings
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. The
grow
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growth
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for
this
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city is almost
irregura
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irregular
rather
Darby
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than Darby
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,
insted
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instead
remain
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remaining
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les
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less
developed.
In addition
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, only in 2007 Nottingham
has
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had
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more
houses
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(180) rather Darby (110)

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "it is clear that".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words houses, derby with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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