The diagram illustrates the recycling process of glass,

The diagram illustrates the recycling process of
glass
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, which can
repeated
Verb problem
be repeated
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many times.
Overall
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,
itis
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it is
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a continuous man-made cycle in which people throw used
glass
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Use synonyms
bottle
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bottles
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into
recycle
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the recycle
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bin,
transported
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are transported
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to a treatment plant, where
it
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they
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experienced
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experience
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various processing stages
becoming
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, becoming
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new,delivered to different supermarkets for reusing.
Initially
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, the waste
bottle
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is collected in
recycle
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a recycling
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bin at home or the workplace, which
followed
Verb problem
is followed
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byit transported
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by its transportation
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by truck to a treatment plant.
Then
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, the
glass
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bottle
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undergoes washing
Correct word choice
and andsterilizing
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andsterilizing
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sterilising
in a
specialized
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specialised
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machine to ensure it is clean and free of bacteria.
Subsequently
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, the clean
bottle
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is crushed into small pieces and melted down in a
high-temperaturemachine
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high-temperature machine
.
Following
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this
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, the liquid
glass
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falls into
moulding
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a moulding
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machine to be shaped into
new
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a new
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bottleproduct
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bottle product
. The final products
is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
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ready for customers to use,
then
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they are delivered to
varioussupermarkets
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various supermarkets
.
Finally
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, the whole cycle starts again with the collection of used bottles, and
keeprepeating
Correct your spelling
keeps repeating
the same steps

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words glass, bottle with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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