The table below gives information about rail transport in four countries.

The table compares four countries – Malaysia, Canada,
China
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and the UAE – in terms of the number of people using
rail
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transport,
passenger
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kilometres
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per
head
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of
population
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and the amount of
cargo
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carried.
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,
China
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recorded the highest number of
rail
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passengers
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and the greatest figure for
passenger
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kilometres
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per
head
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of
population
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.
In contrast
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, Canada had the lowest number of
passengers
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but transported the largest amount of
cargo
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. In detail,
China
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accounted for the largest share of
rail
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passengers
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, with 27
million
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people using
this
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mode of transport. It
also
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had the highest figure for
passenger
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kilometres
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per
head
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of
population
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,
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1980. In terms of freight,
China
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transported 23.01
billion
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tonnes
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of
cargo
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. Malaysia ranked second in terms of
passenger
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numbers, with 5.9
million
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passengers
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,
while
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its
passenger
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kilometres
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per
head
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of
population
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stood at 770. The country
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transported 22.2
billion
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tonnes
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of
cargo
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. Looking at the remaining countries, the UAE recorded 5.5
million
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rail
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passengers
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and 780
passenger
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kilometres
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per
head
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of
population
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,
while
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the amount of
cargo
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carried reached 21.9
billion
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tonnes
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. Canada,
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, had only 0.3
million
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passengers
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and the lowest
passenger
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kilometres
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figure, at 80.
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, it transported the highest volume of
cargo
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, at 28.20
billion
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tonnes
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words china, rail, passenger, kilometres, head, population, cargo, passengers, million, billion, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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