The maps below show the changes that have taken place at the seaside resorts of Templeton between 1990 and 2005. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The two maps display the
overall
Linking Words
change of the seaside resort of Templeton after 15 years of construction. In general, it is evident that the resort underwent a major modernisation during the period, with improved infrastructure being the noticeable feature. In 1990, the area
Verb problem
was seperated
show examples
seperated
Correct your spelling
separated
by a river, making it two major land
, which
Check wording
areas, which
show examples
linked
Verb problem
were linked
show examples
by two bridges. Concerning the eastern
part
Use synonyms
, the housing zone was dominant with a pair of major roads. Another
part
Use synonyms
,
by contrast
Linking Words
, had
vary
Replace the word
various
show examples
public facilities with connected roads and railway. During the period of development, even though the housing area was replaced by the apartments and a supermarket, several
residentials
Use the right word
residential
show examples
Check wording
buildings was
show examples
was
Correct subject-verb agreement
were
show examples
also
Linking Words
built. The new roads
Linking Words
also
Verb problem
were also
show examples
paved to connect all the buildings.
On the other hand
Linking Words
, the western
part
Use synonyms
was
Verb problem
apply
show examples
introduced three new facilities, an airport was erected adjacent to
school
Correct article usage
the school
show examples
, and the southern
part
Use synonyms
added a factory and a ferry. Eventually, these lands
more
Verb problem
will be more
show examples
connected with
new
Correct article usage
the new
show examples
railway line along the coastline.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words part with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
What to do next:
Look at other essays: