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Plastic is currently destroying our planet's air as well as ocean life. Why is this such an important issue? What can be done to fix this problem?

In today's fast-paced world, it is believed that
plastic
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 is destroying our planet's air and ocean life.
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 essay will examine the issues, followed by the preventive measures to tackle
this
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problem
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.
To begin
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this
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 issue is considered
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one of the biggest
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problem
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problems
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 in today's world.
Firstly
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, it is
obsereved
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observed
 that
plastic
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 usage is increasing day by day. The
plastic
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 is
non biodegradable
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non-biodegradable
.
Due to
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this
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, it causes various
kind
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kinds
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 of pollution
such
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 as air, water, and land pollution.
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cause
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causes
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 many health problems in all individuals because they are breathing the polluted air.
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this
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,
plastic
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 in rivers and seas kills fish, birds, and other marine animals.
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 is because the animals eat small
prts
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parts
 of
plastic
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 or
sometimes
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 stuck in
plastic
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 nets or other parts.
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 leads to injuries and death.
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problem
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 requires an immediate solution to tackle
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problem
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. The government should ban
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plastic
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 items
such
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 as
plastic
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 bags,
plastic
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 toys, and much more.
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 will help in
reduction
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the reduction
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 of
plastic
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use
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and
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, and
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 there
would
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will
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 be less
waste of
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plastic waste
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plastic
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.
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, the government should educate all individuals regarding the limited
use
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 of
plastic
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 and encourage everybody to
use
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 paper or cloth items.
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 to
this
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, there must be
proper
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 waste management system followed. If anybody violates the rule, the individual must be fined and
faced
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 proper punishment.
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 will help in reducing
the
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plastic
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use
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and
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 proper recycling technique makes the environment better.
To conclude
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, the
use
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 of
plastic
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 is very dangerous for our society because it creates pollution and harms human beings.
This
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 issue can be minimised by implementing new rules,
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 as
ban
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a ban
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of
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on
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plastic
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 bags.
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, the government should provide education regarding the proper disposal of waste.

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task response
Answer both parts more fully. You explain why plastic is a big problem, and you give some fixes, but some ideas are still general.
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Add one or two clear examples, like sea animals eating plastic bags or smoke from burning plastic harming people.
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Develop each main point more. Do not only say the problem; explain how and why it happens.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear start, body, and end, so the reader can follow it well.
coherence and cohesion
Some linking is good, but you repeat words like 'this problem' and 'plastic'. Use a few different simple linkers and word forms.
coherence and cohesion
Some sentences do not flow well because of grammar mistakes. Shorter and clearer sentences will help your ideas connect better.
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You answer both questions in the task.
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Your main ideas are relevant to the topic.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, two body parts, and a conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
You use basic linking words like 'firstly', 'furthermore', and 'to conclude'.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • single-use plastic
  • plastic waste
  • air pollution
  • ocean life
  • sea animals
  • food chain
  • harmful gas
  • dirty air
  • human health
  • plastic bags
  • plastic bottles
  • recycling system
  • waste collection
  • sort waste
  • break down
  • long-term problem
  • public education
  • government rules
  • take responsibility
  • safe materials
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