The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph
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illustrates
three different
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tourist areas
the
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coast
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, the mountains and the lake that have been
visted
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visited
throughout the time period between 1987 and 2007.
Overall
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, the
coast
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was the most
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visited
area
between
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among
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the other areas
and
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the
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number
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of
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visters
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visitors
was
riseing thoughout
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rising throughout
the time period. In terms of the mountains, we can see a staple trand and
also
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we can see that the
lakes
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overtook the mountains in 1992 and the
lakes
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kept climbing throughout the decade.
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, in 2002 the
lakes
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had
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a noticeable
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drop from 70000
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visters
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visitors
to 50000
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visters
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visitors
.
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the mountain
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visters
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visitors
kept
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slightly
increasing between 1987 and 2007 from 20000
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visters
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visitors
to around 35000
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visters
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visitors
.
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However
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the
coast
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had a small drop between 1987 and
1992
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1992,
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by having
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from
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40000 to
having
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roughly 37000
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visters
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visitors
.
Allthough
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Although
the small drop after
1992
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1992,
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the
coast
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up from 1992 to 2007 by having 37000 to 75000
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visters recpectevly
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visitors respectively
and overtook the
lakes
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in 2002.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words coast, visters, lakes with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fluctuate
  • Significant
  • Trends
  • Comparative analysis
  • Peak
  • Trough
  • Growth
  • Decline
  • Steady
  • Surge
  • Plummet
  • Consistency
  • Highlight
  • Reinforce
  • Data representation
  • Time frame
  • Subject matter
  • Overseas visitors
  • Tourism promotion
  • Transportation
  • Accommodation facilities
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