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(You recently received a notice from your fitness club stating that, due to electricity supply issues, the club will no longer operate 24 hours a day. In addition, the membership fee will increase by 15%. 1 Write a short letter to your friend who was planning to join this fitness club with you. Explain what changes have been announced. Describe how you feel about this situation. Tell your friend what you plan to do now. Write about 50 words

Hello John How are you doing? Today
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 me write a
fittnes
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fitness
club
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 which I go
every
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 two days
, they
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. They
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 noticed
me
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that
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 they have a problem with electricity thats why they cannot service clients twenty-four hours. And
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addition
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addition,
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 the
fittnes
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fitness
club
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 will increase the membership fee by 15
procent
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per cent
. The fitness
club
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 was very comfortable for me
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 the managers and administration
was
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were
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 very kind. If increasing the fee will help to
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 I will stay in
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 fitness
club
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. That price is normal for me. What do you think about
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? Take care Abdulloh.

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task response
Task response: You told the main changes well, but say more clearly what you will do now.
task response
Task response: Your feeling is there, but it can be more direct, like 'I feel sad' or 'I am not happy'.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Put each main idea in a clear part: changes, feelings, and your plan.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Some lines are long. Use shorter sentences to make your meaning easy to follow.
task response
Task response: You covered both changes: new hours and higher fee.
task response
Task response: The tone is friendly and good for a letter to a friend.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: You used a clear greeting and closing.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your ideas mostly move in a natural order.
Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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