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Band 4

Some people say that in all levels of educations, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. Do you agree or disagree?

No, I disagree about the time spent on learning facts and not learning practical skills. We have to know facts in order
understanding
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to understand
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 the history and the
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events
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 that happen
nowaday
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nowadays
 around the world. We can improve skills once we have a strong and enhanced knowledge of the theory, and
this
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 concept is valid for every branch of
live
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life
, not only
science
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science,
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 where it is normal to study in depth
of
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apply
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facts.

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coherence cohesion
Give one clear main idea in each part.
coherence cohesion
Add a short ending to restate your view.
coherence cohesion
Use words like first, also, and so to link ideas.
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Explain your ideas more fully.
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Add one real or clear example.
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Answer the question in a more full way.
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Your opinion is clear from the start.
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Your ideas stay on the topic.
coherence cohesion
There is a basic order in your writing.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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