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It is becoming increasingly popular to have a year off between finishing school and going to university. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this gap year?

Nowadays, many
students
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 prefer to take a break for a
year
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 after graduating
a
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from
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school
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.
This
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 postponed enrollment to
university
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 may have some pros for
young
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the young
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 generation, like having a time to think wisely about what they really want to study next
years
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year
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, but
this
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 gap
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also can
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can also
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 be crucial for them. One of the main advantages is
a
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apply
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free time. Some
students
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 really feel exhausted after passing all exams in
final
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the final
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year
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 of studies at
school
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. Their heads are full of plans
how
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for how
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 to spend
summer
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the summer
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 with friends or family. Numerous
students
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 want to receive a
driver
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driver's
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 license
that
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during the
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 summer holidays or to earn some money to buy
fashionable
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the fashionable
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 clothes they
dreamed
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have dreamed
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.
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of.
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,
school
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 graduates have time to decide which
specialization
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specialisation
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 suits them more
that
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than
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 others. A
year
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 off is advantageous, because of providing to them
unforgettable
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with unforgettable
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 memories after
school
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 routine and help to choose
a
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the
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 correct way of life. Turning to the other side of
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,
students
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 who
takes
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take
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 a gap
year
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 after graduating
a
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from
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school
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 may lose motivation to study.
School
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 graduates can feel free from studies
and
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, and
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 after that
feeling
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 they would not
to
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apply
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go to
university
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.
This
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 lack of motivation should be a major issue for them in future. Another drawback is that some
students
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 can find a job
,
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apply
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 where no education
needed
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is needed
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. They would earn
amount
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the amount
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 of money they wanted and start to think about
little
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a little
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 sense of
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university
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a university
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 diploma.
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,
students
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 are entitled to make their own decisions about
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 break after finishing
a
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apply
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school
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. Making the right choice of
university
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 specialisation is too important for living a life working on a job you really like.

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task response
Answer both sides more fully. Write a clear good side and a clear bad side with more detail.
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Add one or two real and clear examples for each main point.
coherence and cohesion
Make your ideas easier to follow. Start each body part with one clear main idea.
coherence and cohesion
Use link words in a simple way, like First, Also, However, and Overall.
coherence and cohesion
Support each main point with a short reason or result.
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You answered the question and wrote about both good and bad sides of a gap year.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, two body parts, and a conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
The order of ideas is mostly clear.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gap year
  • personal growth
  • independence
  • career goals
  • cultural exposure
  • burnout
  • academic momentum
  • financial burden
  • structured learning
  • transitional phase
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