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Writing Samples
Band 2

People think that the best way to reduce crime is to give longer prison sentences. Others believe that there are other alternative solutions for reducing crime. Discuss both views and give your opinion on this topic.

Lately, crime rates
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 been on the rise across the world.
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, people are concerned and voicing
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their opinion. Some individuals believe that increasing prison
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 will curb the rate of violence and crimes being committed since most of the criminals wouldn't be free to commit crimes. A safe community is
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one without criminals.
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,
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 prisoners serve shorter terms and do not turn a new leaf during
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 period, they become a nuisance to
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society when released.
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, most of these criminals
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 most
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prison after being released.
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, others believe there are different ways to achieve the same goal. They are of the view that longer
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 alone
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 not transform an innate. Some people serve shorter
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 and actually change. The
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 should be
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 the law and
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 committed. Rather, the law system should be strengthened
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 security measures should be tightened in
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crime-prone
 areas.

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Write a clear opinion in the end. Now your view is not fully clear.
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Discuss both sides more evenly. The second side is much shorter than the first side.
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Add one more clear example for the other solutions side.
coherence cohesion
Use topic sentences at the start of each body paragraph to guide the reader.
coherence cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like first, also, however, and as a result.
coherence cohesion
Write a short conclusion to finish the essay.
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You answer both views of the question.
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Your main ideas are easy to understand.
coherence cohesion
The essay has paragraphing and a basic structure.
coherence cohesion
You use one example to support your point.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • deterrent
  • habitual offenders
  • retribution
  • rehabilitation
  • overcrowding
  • recidivism
  • community service
  • restorative justice
  • crime prevention programs
  • youth mentorship
  • neighborhood watch
  • justice system
  • re-offending
  • financial strain
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