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Writing Samples
Band 3

Some students prefer to take a gap year between high school and university to or to travel. Do the advantages of this outweight the disadvantages?

most
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students
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 prefer to take a gap year after high
school
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 to travel and do other personal activities
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 easy will discuss
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the disadvantages and advantages and state some of the life experiences that can be learnt during
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this
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on
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 the
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 hand, taking a
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one year
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one-year
 break after high
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 may lead to
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 of focus for most
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 they might start getting distracted with the fun they are having, not focusing on their studies anymore and
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 may cause them to start
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 interest
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 going to the university, or being drawn
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 when they get into college.
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 the other hand, when
students
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 take
break
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 before going into the university, they will be able to learn skills
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 period of time, identify other things they are good at, like singing and sports.
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 will help them build their individuality,
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 when a student
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 they are good in art work like painting, the student can start painting and selling it, and can use
te
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the
 money to assist themselves during
school
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 to buy any personal
item
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 they might
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in
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 conclusion,
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 taking
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one year
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 break after high
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 can have its down like lack of focus,
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it will
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 help
students
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 identify
alot
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a lot
 about themselves and prepare properly before going into higher
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task response
Answer the question more clearly. Say if the good points are more than the bad points.
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Give one more clear idea about why a gap year is good or bad.
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Use more clear examples to support your main ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Make each paragraph easy to follow with full sentences.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words well, like 'however', 'for example', and 'therefore'.
coherence and cohesion
Check that one idea leads well to the next idea.
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You answered the topic and wrote about both good and bad sides.
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You gave an example about art and selling paintings.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
The order of ideas is mostly clear.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gap year
  • personal growth
  • maturity
  • cultural exposure
  • global awareness
  • empathy
  • work experience
  • internships
  • competitive
  • academic pressures
  • transition
  • financial constraints
  • indecisiveness
  • productive use of time
  • potential drawbacks
  • future plans
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