You have a friend who lives in a city abroad. You have decided that you would like to apply to do a course at one of the colleges in this city. - Write to your friend explaining what you would like to do. - Tell him/ her what type of work or studies you have been doing for the past few years . - Ask for assistance in contacting an appropriate institution.

Dear Manpreet, Hope
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email finds you well. I am writing
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email to share
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exciting news with you. I am thinking of applying for computer programming
in
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Sheridan College, located in Oakville, Toronto.
Sinve
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Since
you
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living there
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15 years, I wanted to know more about the culture, area and the environment. To be more specific, I
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doing a small course on Python
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last
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six months and wanted to learn more about coding.
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reason, I am thinking of applying
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college as it will be beneficial for me to get
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IT job either in India or Canada. It would be helpful
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apply
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if you
can
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try contacting Sheridan for more details on what
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program covers, about tuition fees. If
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can you
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help me
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an apartment near the college area
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I will look forward
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your email. Your Truly, Takdeer

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task response
Task response: You answer all parts, but add a little more detail about the course and your past study or work.
task response
Task response: Keep the tone friendly and natural. Use simple phrases like 'I have some questions' and 'Could you help me?'
coherence cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your letter is easy to follow, but some sentences are not smooth. Link ideas with simple words like 'so', 'because', and 'also'.
coherence cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Make each paragraph have one clear job: reason for writing, your past study/work, and your requests.
task response
Task response: You cover the three bullet points in the question.
coherence cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The letter has a clear opening, body, and ending.
coherence cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your request for help is clear and easy to understand.
The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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