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The graph below shows the price of bananas in 4 different countries from 1996 to 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph illustrates the
price
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 of
bananas
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 in 4 different
countries
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 from 1996 to 2004.
Overall
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, it is noticeable that the US
dollars
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 per kilogram in 4 different
countries
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 showed an upward trend over the given period. The figures for
Japan
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 were significanly fluctuated
then
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 other
countries
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. In detail, regarding the
price
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 of
bananas
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 in
Japan
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 and
France
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, their figures both started at 2
dollars
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 per kilogram.
Then
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,
dollars
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 per kilogram showed a considerable rise to 3
dollars
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 in
Japan
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,
while
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 it remained stable at 2
dollars
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 in
France
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. After
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then
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that
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, the
price
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 substantially decreased to 2
dollars
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 in
Japan
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,
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and
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 1.5
dollars
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 in
France
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. Between 2000 and 2002, the
price
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 of
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Japan
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Japanese
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bananas
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 fluctuated between 2 and 2.5
dollars
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. At the same time, it fluctuated between 1.5 and 2
dollars
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 in
France
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.
Although
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Japan
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Japan's
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price
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 hit the bottom of 1.5
dollars
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 in 2003, it considerably rose to 2.5
in
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dollars in
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 2004.
On the other hand
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, the other
countries
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 saw a slight rise in the
price
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 of
bananas
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 over the period. The estimated figure for Germany began at 1.5
dollars
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 in the first year. It showed fluctuations between 1.25 and 2 from 1997 to 2003. Meanwhile, the
price
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 of
bananas
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 stayed stable
1.25
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at 1.25
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 in
USA
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the USA
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words price, bananas, countries, dollars, japan, france with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "considerable" was used 2 times.
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