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Band 6.5

The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

These two maps illustrates plan for
redeveloped
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the redevelopment of the
 centre of a small town called
slip
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Slip
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.
Overall
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, these maps
depicts
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depict
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 sharply redeveloped
with
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areas with
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 new facilities
such
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 as bus
station
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stations
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, shopping
centre
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centres
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, new housing, car
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park
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parks
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, place for pedestrians only, and dual
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carriageway
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carriageways
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. In the present time, north of the
map
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 displays countryside underneath
was
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, where
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 two shops between these two shops have main road located.
Additionally
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, below
that
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that,
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 it was housing.
Park
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 was located southeast of the
map
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also
Punctuation problem
, also
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 south of
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map
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the map
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 was housing.
Moreover
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,
southwest
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Southwest
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 was
school
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a school
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 nearby housing. Apart from planned development,
this
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map
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 was added roundabout of
dual
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a dual
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carriageway
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 surrounding many facilities. In the roundabout at
northwest
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the northwest
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 corner was
bus
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a bus
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 station and next to it
shopping
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a shopping
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 centre. Nearby
this
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 place is
car
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a car
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park
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and
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, and
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then
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 it was new housing. Below all of these was
place
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a place
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 for pedestrians only.
Furthermore
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, underneath
was
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were
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  part of
shops
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the shops
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.
Moreover
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,
on
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to
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 the south  of
this
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 dual
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carriageway
Punctuation problem
carriageway,
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shown housing nearby
Verb problem
there is
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 new housing and next to it was
park
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.
Lowest
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The lowest
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 part of
this
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 maps out of dual
carriageway
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was
Correct pronoun usage
, which was
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 placed school in sounthwest and next it was
hounsing
Correct your spelling
housing
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words park, carriageway, map with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 7 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pedestrian-only zone
  • dual carriageway
  • current
  • surrounded by
  • propose
  • infrastructure
  • bus station
  • car park
  • residential housing
  • traffic flow
  • connectivity
  • green spaces
  • recreational areas
  • development plans
  • main features
  • town center
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