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The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.

The two charts illustrate the different choices and rewards in terms of anthropology graduates who have finished their undergraduate degree from one university in the initial
years
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 and after 5
years
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‘
work
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.
Overall
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, full-time
work
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 accounted for the highest
proportion
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 of graduates' choices,
while
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 conducting part-time
work
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 and postgraduate study together took up the lowest rate. There were three different types of employment after 5
years
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 of
work
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, which recorded different levels of salaries. In the initial
years
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, full-time
work
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 was the leading choice for graduates, at around 52%，followed by part-time
work
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 and unemployment, accounting for 15% and 12% respectively.
Moreover
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, the share of full-time postgrad study made up 8%, which equalled the
proportion
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 of ‘not known’,
while
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 the percentage of combining part-time
work
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 and postgraduate study together was the lowest at 8%. After 5
years
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 of
work
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, the government sector accounted for the highest
proportion
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 in terms of the highest salary level, at 50%, followed by freelance consultants at 40%.
By contrast
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, private companies made up the lowest
proportion
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 in terms of the highest salary section.
Moreover
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, the government sector and freelance consultants accounted for 5% and 15% respectively within the ranges of 25000-49999 and 50000-74999.
While
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 private companies accounted for the largest shares within the same ranges, at 10% and 35%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, work, proportion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • anthropology graduates
  • undergraduate degree
  • part-time work
  • full-time work
  • postgraduate study
  • unemployment
  • career trends
  • employment opportunities
  • flexibility
  • specialization
  • competitive job market
  • salary
  • earning potential
  • private sector
  • government sector
  • freelance work
  • public policy
  • cultural preservation
  • consulting
  • corporate anthropology
  • expertise
  • accrued
  • distribution
  • sector
  • trend
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