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Some people think that the government should establish free libraries in each town, others believe that it is a waste of money since people can access the internet to obtain information. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

It has been pointed out that some
people
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 think that the government should establish free
libraries
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 in each town,
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 others
belive
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believe
 it is a waste of money since
poeple
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people
 can
access
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 the onternet for obtain
information
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 I can understand that
people
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now a days
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nowadays
 use the
internett
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internet
 to get the
information
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 they need. And the
internett
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internet
 makes it easy to just
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search
 up
what ever
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whatever
 you wonder and gives you the answer in
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seconds
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libraries
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 important for
people
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 both young and elderly because it a safe place to sit and learn
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Also
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 some
people
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 don`t have a safe home to go to, so the library makes it a great and free space for some
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.
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also
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 nice to
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read
 books
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instead
 of just reading on the
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internet
. They serve as important community hubs where
people
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 can study, work, and interact. Not everyone has reliable internet
access
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 or a quiet place to learn at home, so
libraries
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 help bridge
this
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 gap and promote equal opportunities.
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,
libraries
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 offer curated and credible
information
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, which is increasingly valuable in an era of misinformation online. They
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 host educational programs, workshops, and cultural events that contribute to lifelong learning and community engagement. In my opinion,
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 the internet has transformed
access
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 to
information
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, it cannot fully replace the role of
libraries
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. Governments should continue to invest in them, but perhaps adapt their function to modern needs.
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,
libraries
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 can integrate digital resources, provide
access
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 to technology, and serve as inclusive public spaces. In conclusion,
while
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 some view
libraries
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 as outdated
due to
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 the rise of the internet, they remain vital institutions that support education, equality, and community development.
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, government funding for
libraries
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 is still a worthwhile investment.

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Write a clear introduction with the two sides and your view in one full sentence.
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Explain each main point more. Say why it matters and how it helps people.
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Add one or two real and clear examples to support your ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear paragraphing. Keep one main idea in each paragraph.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like 'first', 'also', 'however', and 'therefore'.
coherence and cohesion
Check that each sentence connects well to the next one.
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You discuss both sides and give your own opinion.
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Your conclusion is clear and matches your opinion.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a beginning, body, and ending.
coherence and cohesion
Some ideas move in a clear order from one point to the next.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public libraries
  • community centers
  • educational programs
  • democratize access
  • socio-economic status
  • resources
  • reliable internet access
  • digital infrastructure
  • forward-thinking
  • technological advancements
  • digital literacy
  • online educational resources
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