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Band 3.5

Space travel to the moon is considered ‘a step of mankind’. But some people think that space travel has made little difference on people’s lives today. To what extent do you agree or disagree ? (approximately 250 words)

The extent to which moon
travel
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 should be considered 'a mankind's step' is a matter of considerable debate.
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 proponents advocate for
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travel
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 as a means of fostering human
lifelives
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life
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 in recent years, others maintain that it has caused little positive change.
This
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 essay will critically examine both perspectives before articulating my own. The primary rationale underpinning the argument for moon
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 lies in the potential for changing society as a whole, especially in the world of scientific expertise. It is true that
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excursion
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exploration
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 has contributed greatly to technological advancement, which directly improves human life.
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, some tools that are
indispensable
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an indispensable
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 part of folks' lives ,
such
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 as GPS or weather forecast systems from
satelites
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satellites
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originated from
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 research. These supportive devices play a vital role not only in
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life
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 management but
also
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enhance
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 global connectivity. What is more,
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 exploration is a huge
inperation
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inspiration
 of scientific curiosity and international as well.
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, the latter argument emphasises why
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 discovery has made little difference.
Space
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 programs require enormous financial investment, but have not helped their lives progress vividly. They lead to argue that
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 money and resources should be better allocated to another global problem
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such
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 as poverty or climate change. In conclusion,
although
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 the impact of area
travel
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 may not always be visible, its long-term contributions are undeniable. The technology and acknowledgements from
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 have shaped the way individuals live today

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Answer the question more directly. Say clearly if you agree, disagree, or partly agree in the introduction and keep this clear in the whole essay.
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Develop your main ideas more. Some points are good, but they need more explanation about how space travel changes daily life.
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Use more clear examples. The GPS example is useful, but one more simple and direct example would make your answer stronger.
coherence and cohesion
Make links between ideas smoother. Some sentences jump too fast from one point to the next.
coherence and cohesion
Keep one main idea in each paragraph. This will help your essay feel more organized and easy to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple linking words well, like first, also, however, and therefore. This can improve the flow.
coherence and cohesion
You have a clear introduction and a clear conclusion.
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Your essay has both sides of the argument, which helps answer the task.
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You give a relevant example about GPS and weather systems.
coherence and cohesion
Your paragraphs are mostly in a logical order.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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