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Some people believe that one of the best ways to solve environmental problem is to increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Environmental pollution has been a trending topic over the
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 and affects different media,
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 as water, air, and earth , to name a few. In the next few paragraphs, we'll discuss whether the increase in the cost of fuel will help solve
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 problem. Of course,
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 method has its benefits. Increasing the cost of something will make it less accessible, and people will be forced to look for alternative ways to commute. Eco-friendly transportation has been available in the
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, other countries have yet to adapt to it , making it a privileged choice. Unfortunately,
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, car fuel may cause significant pollution to the air.
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, Jets, which are mostly used by the rich, produce far more pollution than that caused by other types of vehicles. In conclusion,
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 are dependent on it.

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Give a clearer answer in the first paragraph. Say if you agree, disagree, or partly agree.
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Add one more main idea about why higher fuel cost can or cannot help the environment.
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Use a more clear example with place, people, or result to support your point.
coherence and cohesion
Make each body paragraph start with one clear main idea.
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Link ideas with simple words like first, also, however, and because.
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Check sentence order so each idea grows in a smooth way.
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You have a clear introduction and a clear ending.
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Your essay stays on the topic most of the time.
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You use one example to support your view.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental sustainability
  • renewable energy
  • fossil fuels
  • public transportation
  • carbon footprint
  • economic incentives
  • alternative energy vehicles
  • fuel-efficient
  • government subsidies
  • economic disparity
  • urban planning
  • rural infrastructure
  • sustainable development
  • carbon tax
  • green technology
  • demand elasticity
  • energy conservation
  • climate change mitigation
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