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The maps below show changes in the city of Nelson in recent years.

The maps below illustrate the transformation of the
city
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called
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of
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 Nelson between 2000 and now.
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, it's clear that several
various
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apply
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new buildings were constructed on all four sides of the world (North, West, South, and East), and some alterations were made to roads as well. To start with
the
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 north side of the town, the trees have been replaced with a new shopping
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center
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centre
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. And the tramline is built to connect the
city
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center
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centre
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 with the facility situated between the new shopping
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center
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centre
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 and the university. On the northwest side, a fresh hall of residence is constructed, and the train station is moved a bit to the right, to just between the university and
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city
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the city
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center
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centre
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. In the West, what were once three small market stalls are now combined as one big shop. A new restaurant
is
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 newly constructed in the southwest of the
city
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. In terms of
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city
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the city
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center
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centre
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, the
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center
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centre
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 is now being used as a bike rental scheme. At the top end of the road, what was once for car use is now for only pedestrian use; a new surrounding market is formed.
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, in the southeast, bars and clubs are established.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city, center with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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