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Some people believe that children should not be given homework everyday,while others believe that they must get homework everyday in order to be successful at school. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Homework
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 is an integral part of the education process. That's why I believe that you should always approach
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 issue with great responsibility. In my view,
homework
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 is something that not only helps to develop
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critical thinking
 but
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 brings discipline. And discipline is one of those things that you rarely find in teenagers.
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,the period of study
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 student
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 Asia. They learn even after classes in an attempt to catch up and understand the topic on their own
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 the number and complexity of exams
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 they can learn and prepare only thanks to the lack they receive. 60% of these students soon
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reach the height in their careers. Thanks to the discipline he has been taught since childhood and as a teenager. I
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 want to add that
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 a teaching method as in Asia is the most optimal these
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 the improvement of technology and science. People study and find new things more and more often,which contributes to our evolution. And it would seem that
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 a simple thing as the "frequency of
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" will have consequences in the future. That's why I think it's normal to give
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everyday
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. Finnaly I can only add
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that
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 was not enough in my personal experience. People don't do
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 properly
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,so I don't think it bothers them much. So I support and agree
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 the opinion that doing
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everyday
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 helps to achieve success.

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Answer both sides of the topic. You write mainly about one side only.
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Give your opinion in a clear way in the introduction and also in the end.
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Add one main idea for the other side, for example why too much homework can be bad for children.
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Use clear examples. Some examples in your essay are not clear or are too general.
coherence and cohesion
Put each main idea in its own paragraph. This will make your essay easier to follow.
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Use linking words in a more natural way, such as 'on the one hand', 'on the other hand', 'for example', and 'in conclusion'.
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Make sure each sentence connects clearly to the next one. Some parts are hard to follow now.
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Develop your main points more. Some ideas are short and need more support.
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You have a clear opinion about homework every day.
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There is an introduction and a conclusion.
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You try to use examples to support your ideas.
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Your essay has a basic paragraph structure.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • homework
  • daily
  • child
  • children
  • school
  • class
  • teacher
  • home
  • parent
  • study
  • learn
  • practice
  • memory
  • habit
  • plan
  • routine
  • task
  • assignment
  • work
  • time
  • rest
  • sleep
  • health
  • stress
  • pressure
  • family
  • opinion
  • agree
  • disagree
  • balance
  • quality
  • length
  • short
  • long
  • age
  • level
  • goal
  • feedback
  • improve
  • success
  • exam
  • test
  • mark
  • grade
  • advantage
  • disadvantage
  • approach
  • suggestion
  • recommendation
  • alternative
  • support
  • fair
  • equal
  • life
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