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Schools should stop using books to teach and use filims,tv or computer in the classroom instead.To what extent do you agree or disagree

Nowadays, many people believe that schools should stop using
books
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 to teach and use
filims, tv
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films, TV,
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 or
computer
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computers
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 in the classroom
instead
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. I partly agree with
this
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 opinion because technologies can bring a lot of
benifits
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benefits
, but old methods
such
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 as
books
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are
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apply
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still play a significant role. On the one hand, using a digital type of education can bring a lot of benefits. First of all, using
computers
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 can make their life much easier and more convenient.
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,
a
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apply
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students should not bring
havy
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heavy
books
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 in classroom, they just need to come and use
computers
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.
Moreover
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, they can get all data,
such
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 as homework,
teachers reply
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 through
computers
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.
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, through watching films
young
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, young
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 people can quickly understand the main point of the subject without checking a book. Examples from the movies could show what
is the main idea which
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the main idea is that
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 can
led
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lead
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 to deeply understanding.
On the other hand
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,
traditional
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the traditional
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 method of using
book
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books
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 is still important in everyday life. Reading a book is very good for
brain working
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brainwork
.
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, students read and search information via
books
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, they
delevelop
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develop
 their memory and concentration, reading makes their brain
works
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work
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 well. At the same time, reading
is
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apply
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makes people think more and more,
analyze
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analyse
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 all the information. In conclusion,
although
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 modern society focuses on
computers
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,
i
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I
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 strongly believe that
old
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the old
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 method of using
books
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 are stiil imortant and should not be ignored.

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coherence cohesion
Make your main idea more clear in each body part.
coherence cohesion
Use linking words in a more natural way, like first, also, however, and as a result.
coherence cohesion
Add one more clear example to support each main point.
task achievement
Answer the question more directly all through the essay, not only in the start and end.
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Explain your ideas more fully so the reader can see why you partly agree.
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Use examples that are more specific and real.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a clear introduction, two body parts, and a conclusion.
coherence cohesion
You use basic linking words like On the one hand and On the other hand.
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You answer the question and give your opinion.
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You include points for both books and technology.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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