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Writing Samples
Band 4.5

In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

It is argued that in the future, nobody will purchase paper-based
books
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 because they can easily read these
books
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 or everything they want online without paying. In my opinion, I firmly agree with
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 statement
due to
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 the fact that most of
information
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the information
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 will be published online and most
of
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books
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 are readable even for the sensitive ones. In the next
centuries
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century
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, printed newspapers,
books
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 or even magazines
predicted
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are predicted
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 to be replaced by
internet
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the internet
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, where we can access free digital
books
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 or articles.
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 is because most of
news
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the news
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 or articles will be shared online, which
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attracts
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 almost
people
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all people
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 in the world
due to
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 its flexibility.
For example
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, BBC news are no longer
publicate
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publishes
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 the
newest
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latest
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 information through printed newspapers, they switched the strategy and decided to publish the news
in
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on
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 their website.
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, the internet allows for the instant sharing of data across the globe. Admittedly, some sensitive topics,
such
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 as politic is generally limited for its access.
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, when technological advancements came up, political issues can easily
obtained
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be obtained
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 by local citizens
and
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, and
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even they can
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they can even
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 type some
critics
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criticisms
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 about them.
This
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 can be seen in Indonesia,
although
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 the data of
nation's
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the nation's
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 income is kept in
safe
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a safe
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 place, some small mistakes made it spread out accidentally
in
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on
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 social media.
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, technological tools have a significant role in how we obtain the
the
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knowledge. In conclusion, in the future, even though paper-based articles
are
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still
existed
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exist
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 in some libraries or book shops across the world, most
of
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individuals
prefered
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prefer
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 reading free
books
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by
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apply
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online.

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Answer the question more directly. Say clearly why you agree, and keep this same view all through the essay.
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Add one more clear idea about why people will not buy print in the future. This will make your answer more full.
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Use examples that are more exact and easy to trust. Some examples now are not fully clear or fully linked to your main point.
coherence and cohesion
Make each body paragraph have one main idea only. This will help your writing feel more clear.
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Link your ideas in a smoother way. Some sentences jump too fast from one point to another.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple linking words well, like first, also, for example, however, and in conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
You have a clear introduction and a clear ending.
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You give examples to support your ideas.
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Your opinion is clear from the start.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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