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Some believe that research on family history is a useful thing to do, while others disagree. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion. give me idea what to write about

While
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 some people believe that researching family history is a useful thing to do, others find it irrelevant.
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 essay will discuss both perspectives before presenting my own personal view, which supports a balanced approach. On one hand, researching family history may assist individuals to understand their origin and more about their ancestors and how they lived their lives.
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, learning from our ancestors' experiences can be significantly useful
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 using valuable methods for cooking, building, and crafting can be helpful to many individuals and make a living out of it.
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, some people say studying family history can be
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 and can take months or even years
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 people prefer to spend their time on modern skills or personal development

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Add a full ending. Say your view clearly in the last part.
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Discuss both sides more evenly. The second side is too short.
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Give one more clear example for each side.
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Link ideas with simple words like first, also, however, and in conclusion.
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Make each body part one clear main idea, then explain it more.
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Use full sentences. Some parts now feel joined too long with commas.
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The introduction shows both sides of the topic.
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Your first main part has a clear point about knowing your roots.
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The essay has a basic paragraph plan that is easy to follow.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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