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The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade *- labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries.

This
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 table provides information about sales of
fair-trade
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coffee
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 and
bananas
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 in 1999 and 2004
between
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 five different European countries.
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,
fair-trade
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coffee
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 was most popular in
Switzerland
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 in 1999, but it became the
UK
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 in 2004. The
UK
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 had the highest demand for
bananas
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 between 1999 and 2004. The demand for
bananas
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 was less and less between 1999 and 2004 in Belgium and Sweden.
Switzerland
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 liked the most
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coffee
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, which spent 3
millions of
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euros
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 in 1999, followed by Denmark, which spent 1.8
million
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euros
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 per year. In 2004, the
UK
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 became the country which loved
fair-trade
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coffee
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 the most, spending 20
millions of
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million
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euros
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 per year.
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 the spending
of
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fair-trade
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coffee
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 grew twice as much in
Switzerland
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,
the
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it was three times as high in the UK
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UK
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 was three times as high as
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in
Switzerland
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. The remaining countries
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such
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, such
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 as Belgium and
Sweden
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Sweden,
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 had little difference over the past five years. The demand for
bananas
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 was the highest over
five
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the past five
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 years in the
UK
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.
According to
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 statistics, the
UK
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 spent 15
million
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euros
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 on
bananas
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 and increased three times to 47
million
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euros
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, followed by
Switzerland
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which
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, which
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 spent 5.5
million
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euros
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.
In contrast
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, Belgium and Sweden suggested a downward trend between 1999 and 2004, which decreased by half.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fair-trade, coffee, bananas, switzerland, uk, euros, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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