The pie charts show time spent by students on different types of websites.

The pie chart compares the average
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that male and female
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spend
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on several types of
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.
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, it's clear that male
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spent the largest average of their
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on just three
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, namely sport, study and news.
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, the
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of other
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was the same
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as that of female
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.
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females, the most popular category was study. The greatest average
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that female
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spent after study was shopping at 20%,
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males'
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for
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category was just 5% , which represents the lowest
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for boys. Female
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spent only 10% for sport
websites
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. Meanwhile, the
rate
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of spending by male
students
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on
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category was the highest at 35%.
Amount
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The amount
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time
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on news
websites
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among females was slightly lower at about 15%, compared to males at 20%. In both cases, the proportion of spending on other
websites
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was the same. Males and Females spent 10% of their
time
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.

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