The graph shows the number of people taking parts in 4 kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005.

The line chart illustrates the regional number of sport practitioners in 4 disciplines from 1985 to 2005.
Overall
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,
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it
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appears that
Rugby
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has gone from being the most popular sport to the least, on par with badminton.
In contrast
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, Tennis has consistantly rise.
Moreover
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Basketball and Badminton remained the same over the years.
Rugby
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experienced a significant
lost
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loss
of members in
this
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region as their number has been divided by 5 in Twenty Years, Starting From 250
players
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in 1985 and ending at 50 in 2005.
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exode
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exodus
seems to
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as a hundred
rugby
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players
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quite
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during the
last
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5 years. On
another
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hand, Tennis counted around 70 more
players
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in their courts,
as a result
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, it overtaked
rugby
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since 1995
and
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Basketball and Badminton stayed stable with respectively near 90 and 50
players
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.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words rugby, players with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • participants
  • participation
  • trend
  • significant increase
  • decrease
  • stability
  • popularity
  • regional interest
  • key trends
  • peaks
  • troughs
  • local leagues
  • school programs
  • media influence
  • public health initiatives
  • availability of facilities
  • competitive success
  • fluctuations
  • impact
  • major tournaments
  • notable players
  • local clubs
  • coaching programs
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